Knife Haiku

[leghog]

the knife cut deeply
and red stump of a finger
required doctor

 

[leghog]

knife in one's pocket
bone scales and sharpen'd edges
well equips a man

 

[leghog]

in the whittler's hand
his small knife works its wonders
leaving what he saw

 

[caseguy]

He juggles three knives
He is not very good at it
Foot gets nailed to floor

 

[9blades]

From subtle white bursts
the very deepest darkest red
oh $h*t need band aids

 

[leghog]

He juggles three knives
He is not very good at it
Foot gets nailed to floor

Fixed it for ya:

He juggles three knives
But not very good at it
Foot gets nailed to floor

 

[leghog]

From subtle white bursts
the very deepest darkest red
oh $h*t need band aids

5-8-5?

 

[caseguy]

Lizzie Borden facts:
Practiced all day with her axe
Gave mom forty whacks

Having just begun
Looking for a bit more fun
Gave pop forty one

 

[caseguy]

Lusts for Sebenza
Can't afford, buys cheap knockoff
He must be punished

 

[leghog]

a swiss army knife
with blades and tools abounding
makes a man prepared

 

[DB731]

a swiss army knife
attention elsewhere while packing
the TSA wants my life

 

[DB731]

Shiny knife
Stop being a tease
And cut the cheese

 

[leghog]

a swiss army knife
attention elsewhere while packing
the TSA wants my life

Shiny knife
Stop being a tease
And cut the cheese

Those aren't haiku

 

[Esav Benyamin]

the broad blade chopping
turns the trees into tinder
feeding the fire pit

 

[Esav Benyamin]

Those aren't haiku

Haiku derived from zen.

you understand zen
going about your business
without meaning to

haiku is a poem
use seventeen syllables
try to say something

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haiku avoiding
politics and poetry
gazes at the sky

questions and answers

It's been a while since the New York Times provided a real haiku forum. However else the form is defined, it thrives on poets tossing verses back and forth with each other. Maybe an introduction to haiku will encourage some of you to try it yourselves.

Haiku is a Japanese poetry form. There are many styles of haiku because of the different traditions that gave rise to it, but formally, it's simple.

The basic format is three lines, of 5 syllables, 7 syllables, and 5 syllables. There is some room for changing the syllable count, especially in languages other than Japanese, where that rhythm can be difficult to achieve.

The subject is supposed to be a brief description, preferably of a natural scene, with parallels to the human condition.

From Jane Reichhold, and others, Aha! Poetry is probably the best single website introduction to haiku and its many poetic relations: http://www.ahapoetry.com/haiku.htm

 

[leghog]

Real not really a count of syllables so much as phonetic sounds or "on". Though in English syllables usually work. "Muted" has two syllables but three on, "cold" is one syllable but two on.

Here's one of mine. First is metered with syllables, but the second one is probably better (but still not quite right) considering on vs syllables.

tree leaves were once green
cold and frost and low'ring sun
bring muted color

tree leaves
cold and low'ring sun
muted color

 

[Jeff Hooks]

http://bladehaiku.blogspot.com