Ot: Hiaku

Welcome to HI, Thom!

Must've missed you somehow....well, anyway, glad to have you here.



just don't nobody post any flamin' haikus, ok?

:eek: :barf:
 
Since you guys got the Haikus going, here are a couple I wrote, I am curious about what others think of them so feel free to comment:

The Run
As my breathing slows,
A wave of calmnes takes me,
And now all is well.
To Live
Fire burns in the field,
It will some day fail and die,
Will the grass grow greener?
They are my two best Haikus, I am reasonably pleased with them but would like to know what others think. The first one is fairly simple in terms of interpretation, the second one however is slightly more complex. Feel free to let me know what you think it means, how you would interpret it and what it makes you think. I love the Haiku form as it is a way of crystalising the world and your thoughts and feelings in response to it into 17 syllables. I know the second Haiku is slightly weird in this respect (well, just plain wrong actually) but still, I liked it and if it were in Japanese it would fit ;) .
 
Ferrous Wheel said:
And I always thought
that the meter for haiku
Was five-seven-five, man.

Keith
not always
japanese haiku are
it being a opening stanza to a tanka
followed by ranga it all started as a party game

a western haiku is simply 17 syllables
thanks to "on the road" Jack
 
demon tessu said:
not always
japanese haiku are
it being a opening stanza to a tanka
followed by ranga it all started as a party game

a western haiku is simply 17 syllables
thanks to "on the road" Jack


"A haiku is not just a pretty picture in three lines of 5-7-5 syllables each. In fact, most haiku in English are not written in 5-7-5 syllables at all–many are not even written in three lines. What distinguishes a haiku is concision, perception and awareness–not a set number of syllables. A haiku is a short poem recording the essence of a moment keenly perceived in which Nature is linked to human nature."

COR VAN DEN HEUVEL
The New York Times Book Review [March 29, 1987]:
 
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