Not at all. The paper looks very good overall. I just thought that you might find this of interest. It is usually reported that hypothermia is a leading cause of death but it doesn't actually pan out when you look at the numbers. Thats just one study but other studies I have read also bear it out. I suspect the author of 98.6 also wrote something that was a long held belief. I haven't read his book, though I have heard it is good. You certainly have the correct target audience in my opinion. Dayhikers are the most likely to get themselves in trouble and the least prepared most times. If they get themselves in trouble you may also want to mention that the best thing they can do if they discover they are lost is to stay put. That helps us immensely. If they are setting up a shelter and trying to find wood for fire then they are doing many useful things for them and us. It makes them stay put, it also forces them to focus on a task which helps stave off fear and worse panic. You may want to mention that they need to identify and start their preparation before darkness falls not after. Trying to do this at night can be almost impossible. Recognition of their problem is key to starting to do the things they need to do. Never underestimate the ability of someone to delude themselves into thinking that if they just walk another 10 feet they will get out or recognize something or figure out what happened. Seriously, recognizing they are lost or that they need to spend the night out is their first biggest obstacle. I stress this over and over in the SAR classes I teach.
Anyway good luck with your paper, like I said I just thought that you would be interested in the WMS paper.
Regards,
KR
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