Thank you all for the comments on my story...It was written six months ago by myself in a creative writing class. my brother decided totype it up on BF and post it, unfortunatley he didnt write the conclusion. He also has been posting for me for about six months on several other websites..he is usually no harm but every now and again he slips up and tries to act like a tough guy.....
Here is the conclusion. I had been writing "it happened to me" stories at my local campus as part of a creative writing class. I turned this paper in and recieved an A and an opportunity to have some of my work published. My brother really enjoyed this piece and decided to post it on his own and take credit for writing it...I can tell that some of you enjoyed the story, and alot of you picked out that it was in fact B.S.
You think its good enough to win the 100 dollars in Combat handguns or like magazines? Thanks for all the input. My brother will now be getting his own account and I hope that you treat him with all the respect that a troll deserves!
Here is the conclusion. I had been writing "it happened to me" stories at my local campus as part of a creative writing class. I turned this paper in and recieved an A and an opportunity to have some of my work published. My brother really enjoyed this piece and decided to post it on his own and take credit for writing it...I can tell that some of you enjoyed the story, and alot of you picked out that it was in fact B.S.
You think its good enough to win the 100 dollars in Combat handguns or like magazines? Thanks for all the input. My brother will now be getting his own account and I hope that you treat him with all the respect that a troll deserves!
... but if it was just some made up story.. it was one helluva story 
j/k no hard feelings